select smooth shells
doused in fine vinegar
sweet spice
bathed
refined
clarified and drawn
lines - plotted thick
political click
cucumbers made fine
accompaniments
devoured by the
hungry elite
set on self destruct
numbers merited
support for such deed
Author notes
PROMPT:
"We are but bad imitations of fish
drowning in water."
A contest entry
- Prompt; 12 Entries. Semi-quickified. by Naridill.
403 points, ended November 3, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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lima beans taste funny. your poem tastes funny too, but in a good way. i like it, its very interesting to me, got me thinking. a very cool take on the prompt too. awesome poem!
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alivefromlove
Thank you. I am pleased to see you dear soul and glad for your comment here. Very much appreciated.
~Pamela 
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I feel some places could have used more body to strengthen this piece - but as is; has a clear poetic message. I loved where your mind went from the prompt. You phrase deliciously too
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Thank you for your comment. A cool prompt. I am practicing my brevity and because you do it so well, there is no place better than in one of your contests. Thanks so much for the awesome comment, GREAT prompt and the opportunity to write.
~Pamela
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Prefer Navy Beans
A more lasting effect Pam.
Jim
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Jim
You said it. Thank you my friend. ~Pamela
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I believe that we become what we consume. A steady diet of lima beans, makes me wonder, spiced and marinated, served with aplomb, sounds good, I'm sold, I'll have the beans.
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The beans are always up for grabs. Thank you for taking a moment to read and leave your impressions. I appreciate it very much. ~Pamela
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Yes,
Numbers,
the numbers,
always the justification as we eat ourselves
the way whales beach themselves.
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Thank you so much. ~Pamela
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Very clever poem poet! Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you. ~Pamela
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