We stared at our reflection,
hoping to capture the fleeting outline of dusk
and watched as a young koi circled around the crescent moon,
startling the dragonflies' courtship.
My hands cupped around a water lily,
and you reached clumsily for the frog that was disrupting
the sonata of the nightingales.
A tailwind led by the sparrows,
stole away the promise you whispered into my ears,
and the window curtains fluttered to a closure
as midsummer eve echoed one last note.
Author notes
Prompt:
The thief left it behind:
the moon
at my window.
-Ryokan
A contest entry
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Excellent
What a terrific write. Such a great take on the prompt. Best of luck in the contest
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'koi' what is that?
Very pretty verse here.
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I am not a big fan of free verse but this flows very nicely
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Very beautiful. You did well with the contest. I wish those things were outside my window. I loved how you described the animals. Great job.
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This one lingers as a soft song in your ears, even after finishing the poem. Very soothing, touching the core of the heart. Bravo.
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This has a haunting loveliness, such a gentle flow, beautiful descriptions. Thank you for sharing this memory. Very well-done!
Lita
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your poem is beautiful
subtle on the breath of a willow
as though to place myself in the moments
somewhere in time
i remember
love this poem you have posted
mal
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I like the animals you mentioned in this
especially the koi.
Just wonderfull buddy.
Ken
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There's something fascinating about the reflection in water. I can almost see you two leaning, faces intent in looking into that pond. Wistful for a fading summer..that's how this makes me feel
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