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Poor Taste Suicide

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In a dark abysmal limbo I pour my tears

like a tawny port, as I bleed emotion for you.

Dwelling here between hell and a heartbeat...

 

No that's no good. How about...

Leasurely your private silences allow tensions between us. Cold is your shoulder to counterpart my hot longings. So fluent now my idiom of blues...

no no no...damn!

 

Where is my Lestat!?

Where is my Cullen family so that I may glitter?

I want to be a vampire god. Have all those bourgeoisie prom queens kneeling at my feet. Bodies poised to the shape of question marks to riddle in the moment for what is next to come. My hair will be long and I'll sling it over my shoulder like a dark prince Fabio. Then I'll command: dry your idoless tears for you know I'm the truth. Say it. Say it! You're the truth...and you're super cool...

No...well that might...no?...sorry, I got off topic...back to my final letter.

 

Everyone hates me so I compose this, my epitaph.

Your hearts were all so overcrowded and there was no room left for me, so I ask you please to etch this elegy upon my tombstone:

 

Lost on a path with no direction of hope,

my sins a clean slate washed like soap.

All day would I mope, no longer could I cope.

So that's why you found me...dead on a rope.

 

Yeah, perfect. Just need to google noose tying and grab a chair. Wait! Oh crap, my mom's home and I forgot to take out the trash! She's gonna kill me!

 

 

 

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6. I have a desire to read vampire poems. Vast amounts of vampire poems...and emo, reams and reams of emo poems. Write a poem about poor taste. Photobucket

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Comments

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  • daffodilblossom
    November 19
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    interesting


  • malmadre gold member
    November 14

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    This one is certainly out of the box! I love the dark humor of it, and the end is perfect.

  • The Devil18
    November 9
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    this is so good i lvoe ur work


  • Amera gold member
    November 9

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    This is GREAT! You had me totally captivated - I love it when you change your mind in mid-write. Very clever!

    Love,
    Amera


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 8

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    i read this a couple of times,
    I know it was suppose to be funny and it was
    but you see i knew someone that was a cutter
    and it hurt like hell emotionally for me to stick near this
    person and support him..he finally died and on the up
    side you penned a powerful piece Bigperm !!
    just triggered a memory

    love and blessings

    Rend


  • Canto-Brasileiro
    November 7

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    LOL yes, it seems that 9 of 10 teenagers here want desperately to die or to kill their parents, in their poetry anyway. Probably in 'real life' they are the "mama are you baking your lovely cookies today?" type
    Quite a funny poem with a bloody AN


  • Candyknife gold member
    November 7

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    so funny...

    i really liked this, you catch their frivolous dramatic thoughts perfectly
    sadly some are actually blessed with such creativity to make their words so intriguing that you cant help but draw into their dramatics lol
    "Dwelling here between hell and a heartbeat..." such as things like that lol great work here nicely executed


  • Sudo Nimh silver member
    November 4

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    ahahaa!..brava for rendering the hilarity of rampant teenage angstiness so accurately!..if only those darn kids could learn to laugh at themselves in the light this poem encourages.."where is my lestat?"..awesome..


  • Marjorie Marie
    November 4

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    Sooooo super cool. You are the God of poetry and words and I bow down to you. haa haa This makes me wish I was a teenager again so I could have the pleasure of marinating in that self pity that was oh so fashionable at that time. I Really enjoyed reading this.


  • Yemassee gold member
    November 4

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    I want to be a vampire god

     

    I mean, who doesn't? I think Pix said it well about raising the bar. Except lower it a little, or vamp and emos might use it to try and hang themselves.

     

     


  • Fibe Kill-DFW Punk-
    November 4

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    Awesome satire of the melodrama of your average teenager aching for attention. Great diction used. I loved the sarcasm you have used here. Nice work.


  • PyroMom
    November 3

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    First, the graphic in the author notes is hilarious, lol The animated gif at the beginning is just plain weird. Perfect. It's exactly what I, err, I mean Yem wanted for option six. Funny, and with a satirical bent.

    Ah, your words have set many teenage girl hearts to fluttering, with throbbing veins and arteries hoping for just one bite of eternal bliss...and of course the emo aspect of it reminded them of their bottomless sadness, maybe because they got picked last at dodge ball that day.

    I would vote for your poem but I have a feeling Yem won't let me vote.


  • pixiestix gold member
    November 3

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    You have just raised the bar on brilliance!

    Reading your poem had me spinning in the full range of emotions. I laughed, I cried, I made an appointment to have fangs installed, I almost cut myself thanks to your instructional "how to" graphic and I remembered to put out the trash.

    Great stuff in here! I bow before your genius.


  • catz Moderators member
    November 3

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    A poem to die for !! One thing about it, Mom killing you for not taking out the trash will sure save you a lot of time on google looking up noose tying and lugging a chair to the right spot.

    Good one...and if you live long enough I wish you good luck in the contest

    Dee


  • marandah gold member
    November 3

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    I kneel at your feet, oh great one!

    You ARE the truth and you ARE super cool, Sir Dark Prince!!!

    Is there no end to your genius?

    Haha, superb write my friend - oh, that I might feign your brilliance, but moreso that I shall discover your brilliance.

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