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Uncooked

Vigilantes gallant
vie to remove raw product
from steaming soup
Ever do they get burnt

Reality won't allow extraction of certain nutrients
we sometimes choke on

Author notes

PIECE DE RESISTANCE

When the fork eats the spoon
And the knife stabs
The face reflected in the plate
Dinner is over

-Brian Warner

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  • paul claxton
    November 5
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    different


  • Naridill
    November 4
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  • CentrifugalCorpse
    November 3

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    Interesting metaphorical relation to the prompt.
    The last stanza especially stood out.
    Is "streaming" supposed to be "steaming"?
    I can see it working either way.
    Thanks for entering and best of luck; pen on.xx