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Choking Back Tears

 

she exist

within the shadows

no one knows

how she feels

choking back tears

of heartbreak

he didn't understand

that she cared

 

left alone

to fight the darkness

dreams faded

with the light

will there be another

heart to love

choking back tears

she wonders with fright

 

 

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2...She by PeetyBoop

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  • Peteskid gold member
    November 16
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    very interesting like a foreshadowing technique, the reader considers the change and the similarities, a good poem here, something the reader can see well and consider...PK


  • arafura gold member
    November 3
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    Your poems are sad at the moment poet! Lovely work.

  • Bob Fox
    November 3

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    Poet

    Love and seeking it out can be so tiring. And then bingo, there it is. But the heart somehow does manage to overcome that lost love. Happy writing .


  • JinSays gold member
    November 3

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    Chocking-choking. (in your title)
    I think you might have too many chokings in there. Exist-exists or existed.
    Other than that, this poem is sad, depressing and lonely. I hope things get better for you darling.
    love always,
    jin

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