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Stars

The silken stars like lacquer shine
Above the apple orchard here,
And with pale shafts each silver tine
The silken stars like lacquer shine
Against the old saint’s granite shrine,
Now in the autumn of the year
The silken stars like lacquer shine
Above the apple orchard here.

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a triolet...

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  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    November 19

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    Hood-Winked!

    This explores the beauty of the stars, you've captured the imagery of them in a most magical  way, I just love the metaphors used too...your meter is strong and consistant, which for me makes a most enjoyable read...

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    All the very best...
    ~Lilac~


  • XLadyElinorX
    November 5

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    a triolet! I love your triolets, Mike... I love the image of the stars above the apple orchard, and the autumn of the year - it paints a beautiful mysterious picture in my mind... wonderful triolet

    ♠ Lady Elinor


  • sora.
    November 4
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    this is stunning.

  • Purrsanthema
    November 3

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    It somehow reminds me of Yeats. Or like a translation of something carved in runes long ago near a hazelwood.