my friend's probably getting married.
you had something etched
in veins; you slightly coughed
pretending to look for a seat.
i didn't know whether i was drawing
in or out
conventions. i did like
the tension
starting from your teeth-lower lip-chin--
then neck.
my friend's probably happy in her thoughts now.
i swear i wanted to share
and complain about what's wrong
with signatures and vows
with you. but you were pretending
to be
engrossed
tapping the heads of tea sticky tables-
where i didn't belong
not inside your head at least. you were trying
not to look lost
but distanced
the pit of restive breaths
you exhaled. nervously settling the smile.
my friend doesn't know any of this.
Author notes
i don't think i exceeded the word limit.
A contest entry
- Prompt; 12 Entries. Semi-quickified. by Naridill.
403 points, ended November 3, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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That last line
!! The implications are jarring. I did love this - I read it twice and the ending whacked me even harder the second time.
So good to read you againnn little songbird
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This made me sigh; I know it sounds strange, but most poetry gives emotion and stomps in through you so you feel it - but this piece, I feel the message and the emotion are drawn together.
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i enjoyed.
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