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My Teddy Blinked

I swear my teddy blinked today,

As daft as that may seem.
I know what people (most) will say...
But it was NOT a dream.

It's not so mad to care for one,
I'm sentimental though.
Without it, part of me has gone,
The child within would grow.

I must admit that when I say,
"To care for one"... I don't.
He sits alone, we never play,
My age is why I won't.

This simple play we'd once engage,
I'll cherish till the end.
So why must I be forced by age,
To shelve my oldest friend?

The fact remains: he blinked today,
And now it's plain to see,
This ‘friend' of mine has tried to say:
"Have you forgotten me?"

I answered not, but still I stare,
And think: ‘if he's alive',
He's heard my truth; he's seen my dare:
He's witnessed me ‘arrive'!

He wears a smile beneath his nose,
I wonder why this is...
He laughs because I wear no clothes?
This teddy TAKES THE PISS!

To think he's heard my secret tales,
I told to him with TRUST.
I wide my eyes and bite my nails...
To slaughter him: I MUST!

But no, I CAN'T!  I must stay cool...
My sanity, I'll keep...
But if for this, he views me cruel,
He'll KILL ‘ME' when I SLEEP!

Yes, ‘sanity'! I must stay calm!
It's all within my head!
The cuddly toy should see no harm...
Is he...ALREADY DEAD?

He blinked before, but ever since,
He hasn't moved an inch.
My mind's a tough one to convince,
I'll just give him a pinch...

AGHHHH!  HE MOVED!  Or was that me?
I really can't be sure!
I won't be pleased until I see,
HIS FLUFF SPILLED ON THE FLOOR!

So, now it's done... but still, I cry,
My friend lies ripped and torn,
And though it's hard to watch him die,
I feel I'VE just been born...

 

 © David J Martin (2009)

 

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  • dismantle-me
    November 17
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    Haha, sad but funny stuff. Poor teddy!

  • ArchCarXxx
    November 17

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    I really like this poem. It has a unique theme and i totally enjoyed reading! ^_^ The flow of words is great and so is the message. It's kinda sad and I liked the ending. Great job and a great write.


  • LivingInAFairytale
    November 15

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    Oh, I really like this, it's different to the others that I have read.
    I think that the more people think about this poem, it will bring thoughts of their toys
    Well done, fantastic
    x


  • FearedCries
    November 15

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    The poem was genius and I'm sure it got many people thinking of their own old toys like it made me. At first few lines, I was interested on where a poem about a blinking teddy bear was going to go. Personally I really liked the ending, it's sad yet satisfying. Great Write.


  • ElectricStarrySkies
    November 15

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    This is so good. Kinda funny and sad at the same time but i loved it and I know the feeling about having to grow up and so not being able to still have 'special friends'. I really enjoyed reading this!!!


  • suecat
    November 14

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    Oh my, I started out thinking of my own old teddy (no, of course,not THAT old, just realised he's only 9 months younger than me, and my Dad gave him to me in 1949 - surely that's a misprint!!!!) Anyway, I was thinking of him fondly and then, well , things got a bit nasty! Very well done, congratulations! But I'm off to give my teddy a hug, and if he blinks, well, that's a bonus! Enjoyed the poem!

  • sound and fury
    November 14

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    Beware dark night when, filled with fear/In bed you trembling lie/For a ghastly vision may appear/In the blink of a vengeful eye. Sorry, just had to write that, for teddy bears everywhere and as one who long ago came of age and is well on his way to a return to childhood. I love this poem - it begins with a quirky and appealing idea and the rhme and rhythm support this light-hearted tone but you develop your idea and suggest a serious message without ever quite taking your tongue out of your cheek. Strong ending, too. Thanks for sharing this - I really enjoyed reading it.


  • Kesiah Devoe
    November 14

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    I simply adore this. It is so cute and so wonderful, and so funny all at once. And I love the rhythm and the rhyme. Argh, delectable.


  • Uniquely Conformed
    November 13

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    awww

    i think you've expressed that coming to age time perfectly. i like the line
    "his fluff spilled on the floor". for some weird reason, i laughed pretty darn hard. Thank you for posting this.


  • ShannonLea
    November 13
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    ha this way hilarious. thanks for sharing


  • joliemere
    November 13

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    This was AWESOME! I couldn't help but smile in a wicked sort of way as the teddy's guts were spilled. The whole poem speaks of maintaining sanity, but the words actually scream INSANITY!! The man in this poem is seriously in need of some counseling. I rather enjoyed the laugh this poem offered today. Great imaginative write!! Please keep penning!


  • lipman
    November 13

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    This poem is won-der-ful!! The first stanza drew me in and I could not stop reading. I just love the pace of the poem. The first four lines seem calm, and forlourn-like as if the persona is regreting not being as close to the teddy as before. Stanza seven to twelve takes a sudden turn in emotions. It brings across an strange humour and I could not stop reading, it got me hooked. The last line is perfectly expressed. It returns the poem to the initial feeling...and I almost could feel what the persona felt. Nice read.

  • Bob Fox
    November 7

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    Poet

    Now this is witty and funny and though I never had my own TEDDY I can feel your pain. But really a fine write filled with laughter and great rhyme. Excellent work indeed.


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 6

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    Oh no! Poor teddy bear!! ROFL
    You did an excellent job with this. Hilarious. But sad. Poor teddy bear.
    Thanks for entering the contest & best of luck!
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~

  • shedog22
    November 4

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    This was great Really funny !!


  • Karen Layne
    November 3

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    oh dear, David...you surely do have one of the bizarre senses of humour...


  • xxBlack Dawnxx
    November 3

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    well i was not expecting that, it was so amaising and extreamly funny, great write


  • oOHannahListerOo
    November 3

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    Hahahaha

    Dave this is fab hahaha I love it ^_^.It's so mental, perfect for you . If you killed Mr Teddington...I will be highly disappointed with you sir! A great write, witty and quick, as usual! This climbs towards the top ranks for my faourite poems of yours! Woooo ^_^.
    Keep it uuup!
    Hannah
    x x x

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