the characterless are swimming
far less floundered than i
they fornicate ruins,
form new Atlantis
while some of us sleep
the orb of whales
roll tongueless
in a rogue sea
i've come
with no impression
to your feet
ask to resurrect,
resusucitate
you are not horizon,
an edge or well-rounded
even death is pretty
somedays
Author notes
"We are but bad imitations of fish
drowning in water."
A contest entry
- Prompt; 12 Entries. Semi-quickified. by Naridill.
403 points, ended November 3, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Ya think?
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Stunning ending. I adore the contrast of emotions colour through here. Using 'Atlantis' and 'horizon' feel mix between blue and red/orange. Not sure if that was any of your intent but I feel the word choice goes beyond what you are saying here.
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yep.
Love,
jin
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Lol I am going to enjoy your one word answers
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your poetry is always beautifully deep.
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Thank you Michael I appreciate you reading
C
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so I won't be asking you for 'mouth to mouth'
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lol
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