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Spiders and Bears.

 

 

 

Poems are circles
spirals and squares
dreamers and schemers
spiders and bears.

Lovers and weepers
times we can fly
darkness and shadows
learning to die.

Raindrops and snowflakes
liars and fakes
frustrated quills
spelling mistakes.

Days of the past
days yet to come
musical rhythms
haunting for some.

Witches and goblins
something to say
deep rooted passions
won't go away.

Hope and frustration
yellow and red
ghosts inside cupboards
bones of the dead.

A wonder, a feeling
a daydream, a prayer
a journey of words
to everywhere.

 

 

 

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what do you think poems are? what does the music in poetry do?

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  • just mercedes gold member
    November 18

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    Thank you for this entry into the contest. I'm sort of humming and singing this, laughing at my own fears - the spiders and bears - and seeing at the same time a quilt made of pictures, each different but together making something else.

    I like the final stanza, remembering there is no limit to the journey.

  • GordonR gold member
    November 16
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    I'm going to learn this off by heart. Just brilliant! All of it.


  • Nick Tashiro
    November 15
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    Methinks you nailed it. Love-love the title.


  • DogFish silver member
    November 15

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    And...bookmarked!

    Ohh, this is one to come back to!!!
    Well done!


  • LalalalaLoopstah gold member
    November 7

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    Yep. This one is my favorite (and I entered the contest )

    This is really beautifully written. I cannot quote certain lines that stood out, or particular concepts that resonated with me. This did not have sections here and there that captured me; it was the piece in its entirety. Each word, each line, each stanza .... it all just "fit". Like, when I look at a lot of my own writing, I can see the mechanics of it; each word an individual word that creates a concept. But this seems to be one fluent piece - instead of a collection of such.

    Hope this made sense.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 5

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    Profoundly brilliant write of analogies about poetry...Whimsical, humorous, serious, and downright delightful in rhyme and flow as well.. All the best in the contest!

  • Judith Chandler
    November 3
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    I like your playful, childlike write. Enjoyed the short lines and the rhymes.


  • crivanea silver member
    November 3
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    just love it...your amazing with rhythm...well done


  • Amera gold member
    November 3

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    This is truly a perfect poem! The bouncy rhythm is simply delightful to recite aloud.

    love,
    Amera

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