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Broken Vow 5

 

 

He lay his hands into voices

 

 

blisters raw shall bleed sap

yet entwined the bark

he cannot let go..

 

She,

for guilt has no conscience

her flattery of eyes knowingly addictive

hides nothing in bold brass of words..

 

No care in the world they have for others

cold heart tease the material

capturing loose threading

uncoiling the needle..

 

For he shall lose face

nothing to be gained

in tomorrow's truth

was his yesterdays blindness

 

for now

 

she knew.

 

 

 

 

 

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Broken Vow prompt

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  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 14

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    Oh my what a tragic poem this is. Superbly penned and I sense an anger thatb is very tightly reined in. Wonderful write. Thank you so much for your entry
    gaylene


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 5

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    Awesome write here honey

    Wow you so convey such words of brillianxce that can so be felt as so many feels this pain which scars the heart forever more


  • Swtpoetryman
    November 5

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    THOUGHT PROVOKING & POWERFUL.

    GOOD LUCK in this contest with this powerful - BROKEN VOW - piece.

    No care in the world they have for others

    No care, indeed, Julie - as the sky is falling down on them and the walls are closing in. Thanks for sharing - as always.

    Love & Peace to you and yours.
    Earl.


  • penman gold member
    November 5

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    Excellent

    Such a powerful write. And so digs at the inside. Another amazing and well crafted write. Many blessings in the contest


  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 4

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    Wow sis, your thoughts are undying,..
    you never run dry of fresh concepts
    and gravitational imagery, words,
    language.. depth. I love this
    piece and where the prompt
    has brought you.

    Superb!!!

    best wishes in the contest

    xxx


  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 3

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    I knew you would write something stunning.


    the imagry in this; is just unique and bluntly brillant. Bravo

  • speedbump
    November 3

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    Superb

    As always you thrill the reader by your wonderful use of metaphors. I have not been writing as I am working on a book. Keep in touch.
    Love,
    Meleesa

  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 3
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    give me the heads up when this is done. you always write good stuff

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