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Refuge

This field of grain; his refuge

He would sit and play

The grain enveloped him

His music swept skyward

Past the birds he longed to fly with

To the gods he did not trust

To the souls who left him behind

Carried by the winds sometimes

To the souls who had yet to leave him

She will surely leave him soon

As will the harvest take his refuge

Author notes

Inspired by a picture from "Thesoulmirror" http://thesoulmirror.deviantart.com/art/Soldier-of-Fortune-125720247

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  • Jesann gold member
    November 18
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    This is an amazing write, I really love it.
    Beautifully penned.
    Excellent.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 16
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    Thank You for Your Entry ~


    deeply expressive; the imagery of the grain and birds locks it all together flawlessly

    best of luck


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    November 6

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    WOW...THIS HASA SUPERB AMBIANCE..THEWAY YOU USED IMAGERY TO CREATE EMOTION WAS REALLY SPECIAL
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