There she stands.
The one who has done it all.
She has completed all of my plans.
This girl why does she look like me but so different?
She is better. She has completed all and has my man.
Still somehow we are coherent.
She is connected to me-
Completed everthing I have wanted to.
Yet is that me I see?
I see who I will become
If I get where I am going
And leave where I come from.
Leave the never ending unsuccess behind;
Go on to something new.
Just keep my life aligned.
That is me in the mirror
But years down the road.
The vision of her becomes clearer.
Author notes
Ideas for this poem: I see myself in the mirror and I see who I want to be and where I want to go in life but I know where I am and what I am not doing.
A contest entry
- big bang prewrite contest round 1 - 3 by serenity silvermoon.
2100 points, ends December 12, 557 entries
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this is beautiful
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That is me in the mirror
But years down the road.
The vision of her becomes clearer.
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I really like this ending.
I have been trying to write about looking in the mirror..but its never what I want it to be so I start over.
thanks for entering. -
well
Sometimes in the mirror we may find answers we do not like. Contempation can be rough on us. But on the other hand you have created something now fix it into a fine poem. lol
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So far this sounds brilliant. I can't wait to read the rest.
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