the misfortune of sobriety
penning rational expectations in dry-erase
calculating your goals logically as you can
needing not to step out of the boundaries
a psyche fragile as yours requires precaution
and your fear of truths completes the disorder
when you go down there
to the most honest place you can find
to dig out what's left of your will
dress it brightly in the display window
smiling at the administration
in hopes that they won't notice anything amiss
in hopes that maybe
some favorite part of you won't die away
for a real long time
What did you think?
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Very different from what I normally see from you. I liked it a lot though just like everything else you write. You don't seem to know how to be a let down, ever! Good write
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The first part set the stage for what followed. You took a hard word to write on but did it well. I have a daughter who used to suffer with this problem and we had to make a lot of adjustments to the house to keep her safe. Thankfully she has outgrown it or her b/f would be looking for her at all hours.
Nice write.
Sharon
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This wasn't ordinary to me, and these word stuck out:"truths completes the disorder". Interesting read
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your ending made the poem.
the beginning didn't sound like the you i know/have read -- stylistically different. maybe you're experimenting? i don't know. just a side thought. :]
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your comments
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