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The Kill

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He was at his lowest ebb of stregnth

cradled in the deep nest.

He did not sense the killers presence.

 

 

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 9

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    Short but powerful lines...Sense of suspense lingers with your last line that I think was to be read"He did not sense the killers presence...sense I think it your word there....Al the best in the contest!


    • Wickedruby1 gold member
      November 9
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      The Kill

      Thanks for bringing my attention to the last line I will fix it.