It’s the need
The natural instinct
A hunter and prey complex
The survival
It’s the longing
The emotional clutch
The drive of life
And all creation
It’s the wanting
A desire
Hidden in plain sight
That lures innocent souls
It’s the mental pull
The physical push
A dive into deep waters
A gratification
It’s the taste
A sip of the poisoned wine
The bitter sting
That makes the craving irresistible
It’s the pain
The aftermath
The incinerated paradise
The lost ecstasy
That rips kind hearts to shreds
It’s the fangs of lust
Sinking deep into flesh
That draws out rationality
And replaces it with thirst
…and it’s called love
What did you think
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this is really good. I like how it's worded, and the flow is awesome! You did an amazing job writing this piece. I'm glad I clicked!
Keep up your great work!!!
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Very good!
Very nice poem! Loved the theme and the way in which you presented it. Quick comment, to be used or ignored at your lesure:
In the third stanza:
'A hidden desire
In plain sight'
Perhaps change this to:
'A desire,
Hidden in plain sight'
For me this would make the poem flow easier.
Any, very good, and I shall go read some more of your poems I think
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Great advise
I think I just might take that into consideration. That sounds much better. Thank you.
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Thank you for writing this. I feel it...believe it....see it the same. I can also apply this to the pattern of my living. Masterful!
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