I can't take away my words.
Though you know I never ment them.
Is that still enough?
Why has it ended?
I can't close my eyes without seeing you.
I can't get you out of my head.
It was never supose to be like this.
I wish that you could know...
I never ment to say those things,
I was scared of where it would lead.
But I'm sorry I wasn't better.
I'm sorry for all the pain.
I know you never cared...
But please just let me pretend...
I despise the tears that fall.
I roughly wipe them away.
I fall to my knees and scream to the sky.
My life seemes surounded by pain
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Despite what Pyro Angel said, an excellent poem, a few spelling errors, but that doesn't ruin the poem. I got so into the poem, it was great, just like every other one you've written, just take the advice I have gave you before, you should be fine. I cannot promise you everything will be better tomorrow, because everything will never become better, we have to live with it.
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The last line doesn't sit well with me, the "I life" I think should be changed, though I understand it follows a pattern. Also, if you like, you may want to work on the flow. Over all, good job (:
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