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He Loved Me

I.

 

He loved me with his clenched fists,
but there were times when he found his knuckles too sore to touch me.  
It didn't take much to upset him, as his rage fed off of my presence alone.
I knew when to get out of his way, but even then, I wasn't always safe.
Machetes grazed my trembling neck

in an attempt to conjure up the tears that
were already falling down my face.
They met the bruises that our couch had offered me

when he threw my body across the room.
With his drunken breath, he forced me to swallow each obscenity

as if my blood wasn't enough to choke on.


II.

 

He loved me with his booted feet,
but there were times when his legs were too tired

to put forth the effort to touch me.
I never imagined leaving

because I thought that my love was strong enough to change him.
Without the alcohol and drugs to break his mind, he was all that I adored.
I gasped for air beneath the fingers that coiled around my throat.
As they continued to tighten, his nails embedded into my skin,
slowly breaking away bits of flesh that were once a part of me.
With his veins pumped up on cocaine,
he tried to teach me how to beg for my life

 

 

 

as if I wasn't already dead.

 


 

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  • Oh my, this is so heartfelt and sad. You wrote these emotions like you became used to the violence. The imagery is amazing and heartbreaking. The changes in people who are addicted are just horrifying. I do hope the future ahead holds lots of love and beauty for you.
    Gaylene


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 2

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    I completely loved the use of oxymorons in this. The idea of someone loving you in a negative way.

    The imagery was amazing, as always...

    I think the ending needs to be a little stronger... What you finish with is true, but for a poem that started off strong, you also need a strong finish. And in this case, it looks more like you are just stating a fact..


  • penman gold member
    November 2

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    So Very Intense

    what a terrible ordeal, and you have chronicles it with such deep vivid images and the pain and terror screams from every line. i hope sharing helps bring some peace


  • Stickboy
    November 2

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    drug abuse and achohalism is a desease that can tear apart lives of innocent children, I understand how the love was still there, I love the man that hurt me the most too... just not physical hurt, he hurt me mentally

    Sean