We held hands,
ever so gently.
Kissing as if
we knew
how to.
I saw you
as an angel.
Just like
you did me.
Then between sepia fields,
and bright colored skies
we fell in love.
A contest entry
- Short Deep Love Poems by Fire-Fly.
500 points, ended November 21, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful
What a stunning piece!!! The first two stanzas made me think "aww" while the final stanza just wowed me. What a lovely form and a great message to convey.
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Awwwh such a pretty picture. "Then between sepia fields,
and bright colored skies
we fell in love." I loved that ending
Great job on this and congratulations on the honorable mention.
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this is so special...
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What a sweet poem - innocence and love, two very wonderful things, put together in your piece in such a marvellous way. Very well done.
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a beautiful bit of verse penned - so captivating, with lovely sentiments.
nicely done.
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Wow! Really beautiful and intricately woven... I like the romance painted here, the last line seems to hang in the air long after the read is finished... great piece!
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love the balance and flow of this read
well done, thank you for sharing
novy & brazos......
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Then between sepia fields,
and bright colored skies
we fell in love.
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that is gorgeous.
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Nothing like childhood love and memoris from the days when everything seemed so innocent....good job & good luck!
Bear -
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sweet kind short and simple!!!
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Short and sweet was my first thought and so I read again It is a romantic thought.
The Rivaling Mimic -
ohhhhhhh
your words play off the prompt very nicely,,, well done and enjoyed by me,,, the reader the innocence conveyed here is great thanks for sharing
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Awww It's such a beautifully sweet write *blushes* innocence is a wonderful thing. Great Job.
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Short awesome and amazing!!!
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the photograph
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Adorable ...
although I would normally never use that word in describing a poem I've just read. However, I can't think of a better one.
It appears that your cheering section agrees with me, so there's no need for any additional elucidation.
Good luck with your writing in the future.
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This is so light and airy! It actually reminded me of my first lil relationship when I was in lower elementary school. I love the whispy, innocent tone. It's just too precious!
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THe words and feel are beautiful and innocent! I love it
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this is beautifully written, and goes perfectly with the photo. I love the innocence portrayed here. It is a very sweet poem!
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I absolutley love the old photos, all sepia, or black and white. Especially the ones of children showing they care.
Your poem is very gentle. It delivers the innocence of love in youth to the readers in a few words. How sweet the innocence of children. Where everyone you love is perfect. Beautiful job on this one.
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Sweet
Sweet even before I saw the photo, especially sweet when accompanied by the photo. Simple yet successful! Bluebird -
How utterly romantic.. Sweet and innocent and even if it's really short, it conveyed what you wanted to express..
~♥tiara -
picture perfect poetry. - The Manatee
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sweet,
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sweet :)
This definitely successfully captures the feeling of the photo! The short lines evoke a sense of innocence and remind me of a first love, and this feeling i emphasized in the 3rd-5th lines. I love the contrast of the short lines in the first two stanzas with the longer ones of the third--it brings emphasis to the action of falling in love. To me, the comma in the third stanza seems misplaced--I think the poem would flow better if it was at the end of the 10th line. Overall, I love the light feeling of the poem
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somehow, there seems to me to be something about this poem that's perfect... I don't usually go for free verse, to be honest, but I love how short this one is, yet it speaks so sweetly about an innocent love that's - well, between two little kindergarteners who don't know what that kind of love is yet. I felt that way when I was in kindergarten...
"Kissing as if/we knew/how to" - I really like that part... and the title, 'Sepia Love" - that's what first caught my attention and made me want to read the poem that went with it... anyway, good job, poet, and good luck in the contest 
♠ Lady Elinor
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This. Was possibly THE MOST adorable thing I've read in my 9 years at all poetry. Its funny to think that as you get older, you spend time thinking about your childhood wishes. I remember those things. I remember marrying my kindergarten crush under the slide at school. Just 3 days after he proposed to me with a twist tie from a bread bag. Those were the days, when love was both endless as well as effortless.
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I love sepia. I love cute photos. I love your cute poem that makes me go all holdingakitteny inside. and yes i did just invent that word.
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So cute I wanna hug it
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Okay, this is ADORABLE! The ending was like a rainbow, it was so beautifully worded! Good luck in the contest! and thank you for the comment, your so sweet!
x
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This is really powerful.
Very short, and gentle. It's brevity is as expressive as the words themselves, I think. Really excellent -- it's hard for me to express how sweet this poem is to me.
This is really inspiring. I am envious of your skill and talent, seriously.
Great. Excellent. Awesome write.
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aaaww cute.
this poem is sweet and emotional. its short but its very sweet.
We held hands,
ever so gently.
Kissing as if
we knew
how to.
that is very sweet
keep up the good work
THIS IS SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL
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Love it - adorable!
Good luck!
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this is simply beautiful
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this is a great write, it reminds me of the pre-school crushes i used to have
such love is beautiful because it is so innocent and pure. i hope you do well in this contest.
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Classic!
You have a way with words. The last stanza bring your point home in such a simple yet, amazing denouement.
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These few words held so much emotion. I love how you kept it simple, but still packed so much into it.
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Ha! I saw this contest yesterday and started writing one of my own... I abandoned it but it was soooooo different to this
This is utterly lovely. No wasted words and it blends with your pic to perfection. You just painted a huge smile on my face.
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AWW THIS IS BEAUTIFUL I LOVE IT!! REALLY FITS THE PICTURE! GREAT FROM BEGINNING TO END!
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Quite a rapturous memoir of love, connection and understanding between a pair of kindred spirits -- it is the kind of bond many have missed out on in their lives, and some of us will never be lucky enough to find even when we're old, withered, gray and have experienced every other thing possible in life. I do feel that this is but a snippet of a poem -- there could be much more delving into the story if one chose to expand it. However, nothing else is needed, really, and to pack so much emotion into so few lines and words is a feat few of us can achieve well. Besides you, Nicolette is about the only person I know who can. I, myself, am far too verbose.
I wish you well in the contest. This is golden, indeed.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Yes I certainly could've added more onto it but the contest holder wanted shorter. Thanks for your stunning comment.
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So sweet. A little short. It seemed to me as if so much was left unsaid, but thus is life. Too much is unsaid. But it is positively joyous. I like it.
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It was sweet and innocent. I love the way you made the lines break, it's beautiful. Even without the visual aid, I could picture this in my mind. Short and simple, but very heart warming. I wish my first kiss was this refreshing and touching.
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This is brilliant and beautiful, short and sweet. Great job. Way to g
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I really don't know what to say... this is just so sweet and provokes such a good feeling when reading it that it brought a tear to my eye.
Oh to be young again... great write! Very enjotable and a perfect match with the picture.
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Probably the nicest feel-good poem I've read in a very long time. You first stanza was absolutely lovely, soft and sweet, exactly as it should be. Very nicely done, and a gorgeous accompaniment to the image.
Good luck for that contest!
--Katie
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i love this so much. i hope to see some gold on this. very beautiful write. made me sigh. ( i don't read your poetry enough, i need to spend a day dedicated to you.
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How sweet I like the musing this inspired, and the memories it triggered. Nice imagery, too. Good luck with it!
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Awww, so sweet a poem and the picture is even sweeter. Nothing is better than puppy love growing into real love. I wish I saw more of this everyday. Great write.
Keep on writing and I will keep on reading.
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fits the picture perfect. an adorable, innocent piece.
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very disappointing
I cant see the picture... very sad, Im at school, so , ya probably blocked.
"We held hands,
ever so gently.
Kissing as if
we knew
how to." now this was my favorite part, and is exactly how i felt my first kiss.
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That's really cute and fits perfect with the picture
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Poet
Oh so gentle and sweet. If only , as we grow, we could keep moments as like this. Special, innocent and loving. A wonderful pen for the picture. Excellent.
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I saw her in the morning and wanted to chew my own bloody arm off. Thanks for phrasing that so nicely
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exquisitely perfect
I love the title..it draws you in to the poem.You have described the mysterious unbelieaveble experience of falling in love,showing clearly with your direct,beautiful words,that there is nothing quite like it.The lines..I saw you as an angel just like you did me...tell of a heart=breaking innocence that caught a sob in my throat.....
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Awww how cute loved the photo and write good luck with contest xx
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I really liked this one! Thanks for sharing and I wish you the best of luck in the contest! Its short, simple, straight to the point and cute. This made me smile at the innocence. Good job!
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Stunning.
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So cute.
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very cute and simple... love the picture to match
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Oh my...does that bring back memories! Between the picture and your choice words..you have won my heart... All the best in the contest!
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just right
not too sweet, not too short. just right. Love it.
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This is kind of cute, and combines brash and shy, as children are when first they meet. I like the sky bursting into colour as they kiss. Great response to the prompt, it make me feel 'aw shucks'
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I like this because it is , well, pretty. The short lines make it seem hesitant whcih makes what you are saying sweeter. I will not be removing this silly, it is great. =)
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aww this was so cute! i loved it! good work
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