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When God smiles

 

 

 

Poverty persists even with
your optimistic attitude;
I know God loves me
he's just busy cleansing the world.











Author notes


PROMPT:;
"I'll show you a god
Who falls asleep on the job"
(the muse - knights of cydonia)





Poverty being a metaphor for everything fucked up
in this god forsaken place.

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  • Tzipora
    November 3
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    nice stuff here.

  • Virgoan
    November 2

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    Antithesis and balance exist. This poem is phenomenal. Brevity at its finest.

    'he's just busy cleansing the world.' - a powerful conclusion.



    great succinct poem.

    HENSLEY