I look to the heavens.
No stars shine for me this night.
My love is gone.
World broken into bits.
Heart shattered in a million pieces.
There is no us.
I have no air.
Struggling to breath my new reality.
I miss you.
The sun cannot warm.
My soul is dark, cold, frigid.
I am alone
A contest entry
- Darkness Within by ley527.
600 points, ended November 11, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I would appreciate critical feedback
Comments
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so much agony in such a short, simply worded poem. wonderful power in ur directness. amazing!
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My love is gone
Thank you for your lovely comments, its reassuring to know that when we share of ourselves other appreciate and relate to us
Michelle
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So much deep pain is shared in this poem. Life can be so difficult at times, and one can feel so alone in this world. Great job expressing some really tough feelings. I wish you all of lifes' best. Blessings, Patty
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Thank you for your comments. I really appreciate them
Blessings Michelle
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