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awakening all our insight---------

Sweating day and night
to advocate principles
of morality and etiquette
towards aesthetic excellence
I desire to take rest
and eagerly wait for your nod

Oh! My lord!!! where or you?
and what are your plans to save the humanity
from the cruel and evil designs
of stark villiany
who profess peace outwardly
and involve themselves in war related crimes?

Hopefully expecting a needed solution
I wait for you and you alone
thinking not, about other options
my lord! awakening all our insight
we sincerely
reach our ultimate goal, cool and calm

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    November 14

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    Amen ...love the words you put together to convey the message with so beautiful manner..message is wonderfully knitted as well..love the poetry..thanks for sharing ...


  • ParadoxVictory85
    November 2

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    Different. With such a serious topic and good questioning there appears to be a solution in these words somewhere. Its amazing word play, I'm found some orginal terms and the climax is peacefully thoughtful. Great choice of topic. Interesting read!