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Into Tomorrow

Dreamscapes sail
upon celestial waves,
beckoning us to give in
to the absense of light ~

to stand down from our battle,
whether it's wrong or it's right

  -- at least just for now,
        at least for tonight...


As dusk slowly creeps in
to snuff out the bright sun,
let us not weep tears of sorrow...

Come, rest beside me, and
fear not the night --
Dear One, sleep is

  the safest way into tomorrow.


Morpheus awaits
upon wings for safe passage,
from this side of night,
'til morning's dawn ~

let's return to our castle,
safe from the dragon --

  safe until we awake,
    when the dark is gone.


Come, rest beside me, and
fear not the night --
Dear One, sleep is

  the safest way into tomorrow.


My Love, close your eyes,
let all you fantasize
become vividly real in your dreams...

With my arms around you,
loving, as lovers do,
we shall fear not evil's regimes.


As dusk slowly creeps in
to snuff out the bright sun,
let us not weep tears of sorrow...

Come, rest beside me, and
fear not the night --
Dear One, sleep is

  the safest way into tomorrow.

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

X i a n a r i A

Inspired by:
The Safest Way Into Tomorrow/Reprise
from Trans-Siberian Orchestra, "Night Castle," 2009

Written in TSO's lyric style.

Dedicated to my Love
(Written while she slept.)

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  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 26
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    i liked this.


    lol not your usual love stuff but nevertheless i liked it.


  • penman gold member
    November 24
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    excellent

    What a fantastic write. Such beautiful background to match the words. Congratulatios on the gold.


  • islekine gold member
    November 10

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    Really wonderful piece!

    LOVE the bg...and the poem is beautiful...wonderful journey...
    thanks for the ride!
    Best wishes in the contest and always!
    Time to take out the TSO Christmas disc!
    thanks for sharing...

    and

    • Xianaria gold member
      November 10
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      Already have! Seeing them in less than 2 weeks!''

      Thanks Julie!

      ~ Tim


  • manatee
    November 9

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    Wonderful. Such lyrics could put a song into the Billboard Top 100. -The Manatee


  • Wolfdog silver member
    November 5

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    Elegant

    Ah, one of your very best, that is for sure, and I loved your background as well. You always express your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing.


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 10
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      Hey Clovis!

      One of my very best? Wow, thank you!
      I can't take credit for the BG, I snagged it from TSO's website...

      ~ Tim


  • World So Cold
    November 5
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    Cool. Kinda on the dark side, but good. ^w^


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 10
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      On the dark side?
      Behind the metaphors, it's about sleeping/dreaming and getting away from the previous day, headed into tomorrow.

      Thank you for your comment!

      ~ Tim


  • taoareyou
    November 5

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    There is something about watching the ones we love sleep that inspires us, no? I admit I have not heard the music this was inspired by, but it certainly has an evocative medieval feel to it. Enjoyed the read.


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 10
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      Thank you!
      And yes, I agree ~ watching loved ones sleep is a beautiful thing, and is truly inspiring. I'm glad you enjoyed the read! Thank you for your comment.

      ~ Tim


  • awannabepoet
    November 5

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    This was excellent and well I love the background too, lovely way to present the piece.

    thank you for sharing as always Tim, yours words do carry the reader from the dreamscape.


  • Debbydoes
    November 5

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    I adore Chris Cafferty and TSO.

    Such a beautifully written poem. I'm truly impressed. I think this is the best that I've read since I've started commenting on other poems here.

    It's perfect and I wouldn't change a thing.

  • i love this. It had very magical type imagary in it-almost dream like quality. love the fact that not only is the subject transitional but also the poem itself in its flow seems to appear also transitional. I love the enigma that you have created in this poem. Very good write-keep it up!

  • It's very sweet, but very abstract. I had a hard time pinpointing a meaning. Which can be good and bad; good if you intended it to be that way, bad if you didn't because you're message didn't get through.

    But either way it's a very pretty piece. And the background works very well with it.


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 5
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      Thank you ~
      In a nutshell, it is about how sleep takes you from one day to the next. Put down your wearies, your troubles, and dream. Morpheus is the "god of dreams" that takes you through safe passage in the night; all else mentioned here are metaphors for troubles during the day that can be escaped while asleep.

      ~ Tim


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 5

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    Stunning!

    Absolutely stunning presentation between the background and the lyrical rhyming! I have not heard any of their music, but this is so dramatic, yet romance and serenity plays an important theme especially towards the end....Now I am curious about this group, and your write can be credited for such interest....I know you will do well with your masterful penning here! Bravo!


  • Mr. Kodak
    November 5

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    fricking awesome

    i love the poem in general it goes well with the background which really accents the piece to help the reader imagine their surroundings....nice job hope to read more of your works in the future


  • KariiB89
    November 5

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    STUNNING.

    This poem relates exactly to how i've gotten through the last week.
    By sleeping away the worries that plague me.

    I absolutely loved how you worded this, and your flow is great.
    Definite favorite for the night.
    Keep it up, this was quite enjoyable, and very well written.
    <3


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    November 4

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    I do not know the song, but the melody you've created from this is that of a knight is shining armor! I love your poem

  • henryjoe
    November 4

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    My first impression of this poem is victorian chivalry is not dead.


  • Ice Queen
    November 4

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    Very nice, and I loved your style you wrote it in. Good job and good luck in my contest. Keep up your good work!


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 4
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      Thank you! I enjoyed the challenge! I do hope we get more entries in this contest, tho ~ so much good stuff yet untapped!

      ~ Tim


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    November 4

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    You Rock! Loved it!
    Every peice of this is fantastic right down to how it was done.
    Words are magical!
    Great work my friend.

    Hugs
    ~Lisa~


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 4

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      Thank you, Lisa

      This was fun to write! To be able to step into a TSO mindset was a pleasure, and a challenge!

      I'm glad you enjoyed the read!

      s

      ~ Tim


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 4

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    wow this is stunning Tim and
    beautifully written, you never cease
    to amaze me.your poetry is so deep and
    thoughtful! I love it!!

    love and blessings

    Rend


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 4
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      Thank you, Rend

      TSO is probably the ultimate concert experience, and one of my all-time favorite groups...When I saw this contest, I knew I had to write for it, but it was just a matter of which song? I was able to sneak my Love into this, and I really like how it turned out (not bad for being nearly asleep!). I didn't want to leave it unfinished last night because I wanted my thoughts of fighting sleep & then giving in, with my arms around her...

      Fittingly, once it was done, I did just that. Kinda...She wasn't here, but she joined me in my dreams.

      Yeah yeah, I turned a poem about sleep into one for my Love... lol

      I'm glad you enjoyed it, this was my B-day gift to myself: something that included my favorite group with my favorite girl!

      Love & blessings, my friend ~

      Tim


  • Ice Queen
    November 2
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    Nice to see a reserved in here. I love the background and the little rock on dude! I'll be sure to give your poem a proper comment once you have it finished. FYI, their new CD is amazing as always.

    • Xianaria gold member
      November 2
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      I've already got my tix Front row, Seattle ~ Nov 21!

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