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Love Me Softly

Love me softly, caress my soul sweetly,
      drowned my heart in your love completely.
Hold me here, hold me tight in your arms,
      seduce me tonight with your various charms.
Whisper sweet nothings into my ear,
      I love hearing your voice, so low and sincere.
Your touch, tender, gentle, and extremely pleasing,
      you leave me breathless with all this teasing.
Our tangled bodies soon slip under the covers,
      and for the rest of our lives we're star crossed lovers. 
So love me softly, caress my soul sweetly,
      and i will drowned your heart in MY love completely.
   

A contest entry

I am finally done... i wante a short simple ending that seemed to wrap it all up!!! i hope this is good!! lol

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  • Fire-Fly
    November 10

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    This is a very nicely written poem. I like the way you've set it out and your line formation. Very lovely use of language, and I think the repetition of the last two lines works perfectly.

    One small thing though - in the last line, should the word 'drowned' be drown? Just an observation which takes nothing from the poem itself.

    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • ubercrazygirl gold member
    November 7

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    this is one of those writings where you read it and just wish you had someone that felt that way about you.. well done, you drew me into the feelings of the poem and I was lost in happiness for a moment.

  • Where The Heart Is
    November 2

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    This was really good. I liked it!
    I thought that it was well written and had a sweetness with a more modern vibe to it. Great job!