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Gathering the Garden

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You burst through these ramparts of knowing,

thorns embedded in your fevered fingertips
from gathering the garden.

Your voice, a profound echo in the wilderness,
called out my name with longing apparent
in your shimmering eyes, unwept tears welling there
to quench your thirst for sorrow's strength.

We belong in this dream together,
you declared - knees unbowed, hands trembling.

I fell slowly into your wild words
as if floating through time and space,
unsure where to land -

or whether to touch earth at all.

You whispered gentle leaves
into my heart - you said, 
there will be no more weeping,
save for joy.

There are promises to keep
upon this winsome journey.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Sprite silver member
    November 16

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    Enjoyed this.

    I especially like the beginning. I rather imagine that the "thorns" are the barbs of life endured. Not in love with lines eight and nine because they interrupt the flow and they are also reminiscent of other poems I have read.

    I really like the ending. (The last six lines.) They are so delicate and full of hope mixed with past disappointment.

    Thanks. I enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest, even if you are a competitor!

    ~ Joyce


  • Peteskid gold member
    November 16

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    I nespecially liked-
    Your voice, a profound echo in the wilderness,
    called out my name with longing apparent
    in your shimmering eyes, unwept tears welling there
    to quench your thirst for sorrow's strength.

    beautiful poetry here...PK


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 7

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    there are so many images swirling in this poem, it's almost difficult to breathe. what a beautiful picture and what a beautiful reply to it.

    good luck in the contest.


  • Lord Gegishov
    November 6

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    What an exquisite poem! I have been trying to re-enter the beautiful realm of poetry and have been using Keats as a guide. But you, my Friend, are forcing him to share that role. With each of your poems, I feel I am being steeped in warm water. And what an ablution!


  • tomisb
    November 4

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    You catch the desperation and the frecklessness of love spun in a web of reality and dreams so interwoven, we are unsure of anything but the other. Love the feelings created and touched in the last verses. Felt like a dive, the plunge of forever after risking everything in the name of love. Beautiful.
    Peace,
    Tom B.

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