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two unfinished poems.

i woke up today
the same way i woke up yesterday
i get up and look through my window
i'm lookin down on all the people below
i'm stuck on the wrong side of a one way mirror

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you dont want to hear i love you
you told me so just yesterday
so i'm not going to say it
but youc ant stop me from feeling it.

i cant stop thinking about you
you're everything i do
whats mine is yours
but yours isnt mine
you just have no clue
how much im in love with you.

Author notes

i dont think i'll finish these, but you never know, i may be struck with some crazy inspiration, ya never know.

ask anything, any comment is nice. hate it or love it, just let me know.

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  • chrissaaay
    November 21
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    this is what hit me after the 1st:

    everyone just keeps moving
    unaware without a care
    never realizing what theyre missing

    now thats just a newbie's input, but hey. :] i like it tho

  • Juno101
    November 9
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    I don't care for the second poem but the first one is probably perfect the way it is. Love that last line.