for 18 years you've been there for me
i thought there'd be 18 more to come...
how you're laying there, sleeping
you dont even know what they've done...
i hope you dont wake up
i really do.
i want you to dream as much as you can
of when we played
of when we laughed
and tickled eachother
i hope you dream of things
a father should never miss.
i hope you dont wake up an realize you will.
i hope you realize i'll set an extra chair
for you at my wedding,
reserve a spot for you
in the bleachers when i graduate.
i'll credit you with being my rock
my ground to stand on
and reach for the sky from.
i'll make you immortal,
remember you as my dad.
my hero. my idol.
Author notes
dear dad: i love you. say hi to John Bonham for me, cheers.
ask anything, any comment is nice. hate it or love it, just let me know.
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that fourth stanza really tugged a person's heart strings, and i do agree, it's not about perfect grammar or punctuation, or spelling, or even composition and rhyme scheme, i think that stuff, most of the time is overrated. it's about what you did throughout this poem, make some one feel, make them relate and maybe understand how you felt. very moving, good stuff
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I think the others have already said what can be said about this poem.
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Wow
This is definitely one of the saddest poems I've ever read. Not many poems have pulled that much emotion out of me. Thanks for that. This is a really nice piece. I like your style. Short and to the point.
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thank you! i rather like my style too
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This is a truly amazing piece full of raw emotion that some writers can't manage. I like the repition of 'I'. This adds a personal aspect although the lack of capitals throughout the entire poem confuses me.
Well done and thankyou for sharing such a beautiful piece.
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most of my poems are very informal, i dont bother with capitals or perfect punctuation much. some spelling slips through, but its never how well the poem is written that carries its value as a poem, its the idea and emotion conveyed through it. thanks though
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Beautiful
This is a very sad and deep poem. I love it.
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I like this poem
you really get across the sense of desiring innocence and nostalgia. The poem is beautifully written and sincere.
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