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the impossible

musical involvement
and a thumping bass retreat
screw me
she whispers
to the thought of yesterdays
and tomorrows
forget today,
i already have
and think about the
impossible

From my heart to your eyes

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  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    November 6

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    very unique and original!! quite fresh and stands out from the normal submissions of writes on the site. I enjoyed it very much!! Thank you for sharing.
    peace and light,
    Kendal

  • Blackrabbit
    November 3

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    This peice forces me to read it and reread it a couple of times to get a real feeling for it. It feels like it brought to us in three parts but they fit so well. The power part is the Screw me part but it couldn't stand alone. I really like this and its because of the last part, forget today, I already have and think about the impossibe. I can see myself saying this to myself while downing a hard drink. The whole thing really. I can see the picture, it may not be the picture you wanted to paint but I see one none the less, and I like it. So cool

    Uncle Rabbit


  • ParadoxVictory85
    November 2

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    Very personal and telling piece, from your perspective. My fav part: "screw me
    she whispers
    to the thought of yesterdays
    and tomorrows". Keep up the great efforts! Write on!

  • Annorlunda
    November 2

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    Good poem

    I liked the creativity and the use of 'screw me' was powerful (standing on its own).

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