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Organic Fever

Hold me with your pettles sweet,
keeping firm with rooted feet.
With seductive scent you tease my nose,
As you are mine, a lonely rose.

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  • Tqop
    November 16
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    This sounds sweet.


  • Note The Sarcasm
    November 3
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    This was very sweet and cute, Lieber. I loved it. Great write!

    MfG,
    Steph K.