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I meant it.

Trying to find the words,
Some just don't tell our story right,
Once more a girl is left behind,
but once more you're happy,
That's all that matters to me, you know I'll be here.
Cry to me and share your thoughts,
just don't leave me how you did before,
I meant what I said...
You aren't going anywhere without me.

Author notes

Don't forget our plans... allbeit I'll spend a year without... don't make it forever... I know I'm not bulletproof but you've got one more shot... we'll see what happens.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Adamastor
    November 25
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    Dear Miss Confusion

    Hello, allow me to introduce myself - my name is Adamastor, and because you are British, I shall give you one extra applause than I would usually give.

    First of all, I noticed that on your profile you stated that your poetry is dark ("sod off" bit). Well, I'm not going to sod off, since I like poetry of any nature. Anyway, I would like to leave a comment on your poem.

    I like the poem here. So I'm going to give it a score of three. However, as I am new I can only affor to give you a score of one because I don't have many points. Since I promised that I will give you one extra point the total shall be two. Please remember that my review is a score of 3. Thank You. Enjoy the rest of your weekday.

    Adamastor

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    P.S. if you like dark, I've done two "Dark Comedies" if you would like to see them.


  • angel of the dead
    November 20
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    i like this

    Trying to find the words,
    Some just don't tell our story right,

    that is a great line i like it a lot, it shows a great deal of emotion.
    great job
    love
    angel of the dead


  • sgking123
    November 8

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    intense

    statement of helplessness a being unbale to exprss andemote out your feelings. I liked this poema great deal .Guess yu did a lot of work.get back to me and see if my poems have something similar

  • bballer21
    November 2

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    I love this, i really do. It was a fantastic choice of words. and i completely agree 100% .. "Trying to find the words, Some just don't tell our story right." that is brilliant. it says it all. i couldn't have said it better myself. Again, i love this. Fabulous poem! Keep on continuing to write!