I was sucked in
to never be saved.
So I thought, anyway,
that's what I was told,
so I agreed and kept on.
Kept on with this life of mine.
I was good at being bad,
until one dark day.
My knight in shining armor
came to save me from my life.
That night, we talked about everything
my life his life
my sins his sins
my past his past
my family his family
love love
us together.
At that moment, time dissipitated.
Everything I have ever done
didn't matter to him and
everything he had done,
didn't matter to me.
Thus, we realized
this life we lead
is not for us.
And at that exact moment,
that suspended time,
we shared the fateful kiss.
From then on, we knew
that we would battle
our inner demons
together,
no matter what the cost.
Author notes
I had no title for it. haha
but seriously, this is the first poem I ever wrote,
so about two years ago?
haha this is old and cheesy.
xD
What did you think
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wow this was great. you believe what people tell you whether you want to or not, i've learned this lesson time and time again. love can often feel like our only savior in a way. but in the end it seems it just breaks us even more. but this was perfect especially for being your first poem.
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O:!
wow, that's like, just wow, i could actually picture the scene, it looks like you had an amazing talent from the start -
Very cool for a first write Sarah!
I really liked the form of this part:
my life his life
my sins his sins
my past his past
my family his family
love love
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very nice and optimistic for a first too.. even with a knight in shining armor, how romantic
no really, in all seriousness, it makes me smile in a good way, my first was either one about time dragging on or one about man's unending cycle of destruction.
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This was back when I was optimistic. Now I'm the exact opposite.
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This was back when I was optimistic. Now I'm the exact opposite.
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Ooh pretty
My first was when i was maybe 8 or 9.
it was about a highwayman's lady, who got upset with him for having other ladies, so she killed him ^-^
Very nicely done!
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Haha that sounds like a great time. XD
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i know! *highwaymanshooting*
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lol this is so cool
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Haha I think it is a wonderful poem, especially for being your first. I love what it portrays. Good Write! haha
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