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Bleed

 

Bleed

 

 

A Poet must commit truth

in a time of falsehood

be a seer in the kingdom

of the blind

 

He must write from the

uterus

and she from her nads

 

She must not shriek "ICE"

in a burning room

or he conspire in war

 

We must of all

bleed words

 

 

 

Author notes

50 words

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Virgoan
    November 17
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    I must say that with 50 words, you've used them well. I like the correlation of the beginning and ending part - perfectly coinciding each other.

    I like everything in this piece. This is an excellent poem.


    Thanks and regards,

    Hensley


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    November 11
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    I like the contradictory imagery in this piece and how it pretty much states that each poet must draw from more than just the obvious about him/herself to really create a masterpiece. The second stanza especially displays this fact vividly.


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    November 3

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    Unfortunately, we poets are committed to always speaking truth, even when lies would better serve the general public, and stand up for those who are too faint of heart or do not have the power to speak for themselves. Even though this piece is so short, your words carry a great deal of power, and your meaning is unmistakable. I have missed your words, with their beauty and their grace. I could only hope that my pieces are half as powerful as yours.

    I wish you well in the contest and in life.



    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • ShaShay
    November 3

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    Very spellbinding. You always seem to bring meaning to seemingly meanless words. You make beauty from hurt and meaning into fruitless appearing situations. This is a wonderful write.
    A Poet must commit truth
    in a time of falsehood


    This is a great beginning.
    Sharon


  • Allyce May gold member
    November 2

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    WHAM, BAM, THANK YOU MANNNNN. The first stanza is a slap in the face, but I firmly believe that you are that seer and you're using your powers for good

    Grand as ever

  • Rowan gold member
    November 2
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    I love Stanza 2, lol. From the nads, huh? Hmmmm.


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 2

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    must commit truth

    in a time of falsehood

    yes, the first imperative of poetry

    I like the play with 'seer', and the second stanza is very strong.


  • Cannonsfire
    November 2
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    Yep, that's why it becomes painful sometimes C


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 2
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    Ahhh, you sooo rock, my illustrious Friend. Good luck in Hensley's contest, Scribe.



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