I would like to bring you here
Peppered in beauty and glitter
Ape of truth, apple of youth
I don't even really care...
Already I find myself stumbling
On the words I'd like to say
I'd like you bright and wide
dreamy eyed and perfect to obey
I'd hate to see you drowning
In the ocean of your depths
But I will swallow your salty tears
And swim upon the current of your breaths
My secrets are too many to name
I'm haunted by a fear I cannot tame
The darkness inside is eating me out
Don't you worry this is what it's all about
The famous gillotene whores
Looking in me for something to scorn
I waste away here for the honest one
I won't call you my savior but your
The only man who can
rescue me from danger
hey hey man, don't be a stranger
A contest entry
- Secrets. by n.e.o.n.
400 points, ended November 8, 18 entries
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Comments
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I have to agree as well that this was very creative. I enjoyed the little bits of rhyme, really added a strong effect. Kind of dark in some spots, but I enjoyed the darkness.
Thanks for entering and good luck. 
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Imaginative work
The language use in this was awesome. Some lines in particular stood out, such as:
'I would like to bring you here
Peppered in beauty and glitter'
'I'd like you bright and wide
dreamy eyed and perfect to obey'
'The famous gillotene whores'
I like to see creative writing like this.
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