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My Baby in my Arms Tonight

(woman)
you really love mmmh thats right then why were you with her last night?
(man)
baby baby its a lie you have to know i love you and it isnt so
(woman)
if thats the truth tell her you are mine baby i want to believe you
(man)
baby baby why cant she just be my friend you know our love is strong like a vine you know i want to be your baby throughout time
(woman)
you say you only want me why did her message say you gave her a night of ecstasy
(man)
it isnt true thats a lie it is only you i want at night
(woman)
if thats true then why must you be her friend and why dont you tell me where last night you went
chorus (woman)
baby baby i love you so
baby baby i just need to know
i dont see what you need with her
why cant things be like they once were
chorus (man)
baby baby i love you
baby baby believe its true
i have known i need to try harder to show it
i love you please dont forget
(woman)
baby what can i do now i just want to make you leave somehow our love was so strong where has it gone
(man)
baby please give me a chance i will show you romance let me take your hand i will remind you im your man please love me i will beg on my knees im not hers i swear im all yours
chorus (together)
baby baby why cant we be
baby baby why not you and me
baby baby as the walls crumble down
baby baby i will always stick around
baby baby i love you so
baby baby i need you to know
baby baby lets end this fight
baby baby lets make love tonight
(woman)
baby baby i think i should say we need to go our own ways
(man)
baby baby im pleading now  lets work it out some how
chorus (together)
baby baby it just aint right unless i can hold you in my arms tonight
baby baby it just aint right our love is losing this fight
baby baby

Author notes

ok not too much criticism first song i have posted so be gentle lol but truthful what do u think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • no more name
    November 5

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    Baby - baby - baby please don't go
    Baby - baby -baby I love you so
    Baby - baby wait a minute I need my viagra
    okay
    Baby - baby - baby let me suck your toe....lol
    okay now I'm sick ewwwww.

    Very good poem on the conversation of two lovers. This is quite different and I like it.


  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    November 2

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    I think this could be a strong song. Some of the lines run to long. Take out some of the baby parts and you got a hit. For your first song it was not that bad over all great work.