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Bulletproof

Watching as things develop,
maybe this is it this time,
things move faster and new things happen,
I don't think I'm curious anymore,
intense; things continue
warning you the message rings out,
now after all of it; standing hearing these things,
Make up your mind I'm not gonna wait forever,
I'll be here for you but one more time and that's it...
Three shots... I'm not completely bulletproof.

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  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    November 4

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    Come One, Come All Contest Judging

    1. Poetic Device - 7/20
    2. Theme and Emotional Connection - 5/10
    3. Creativity - 9/20
    4. Vocabulary - 8/15
    5. Title Relation - 7/10
    6. Bonus Points for "It" Factor - 6/25

    TOTAL: 42/100


  • BloodWhiteOleander
    November 3
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    hey this is good. good luck in the contest hun!
    xoxo ellie.


  • awannabepoet
    November 2

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    Oh, I like this poem allot, three chances and then your done. Not sure what message is to be revealed but it sure sounds interesting.