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[dark gray clouds] (haiku)

dark gray clouds~
blackbirds perch on powerlines
looking south

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  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    November 10
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    Way

    cool Dennis! Congrats on the Gold. You turned the branch into a power line & the host didn't mind. Go figure. Vivid imagery here. Well done.


  • amnouup
    November 10
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    Very nice

    Its an excellent haiku, really saw the bird :-)
    regards,
    Mou


  • Swan song gold member
    November 7
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    yes they do in droves well done


  • Tqop
    November 6

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    Hi dennis,

    THis is a lovely poem about the birds on powerlines. Great job.


  • ZachP gold member
    November 5

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    when a man calls himself "haiku-bless-you"
    and you click to read a haiku,
    you expect brilliance~

    and that is what I have read here, dear poet.
    I do not know how you cram so much
    into just a sprinkling of words.

    But wow~

    Thank you for sharing,
    and good luck in the contest.
    Zach Estel.

    • Haiku-bless-you silver member
      November 5
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      I may just have to change my name now if that's what you expect...LOL

      Thanks for the kind words my friend.

      Dennis


  • SheWolfNLust silver member
    November 3

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    I just dropped by to see your poem and very much enjoyed it, I so love each line and say bravo well done

    Much luck to you in the contest and a beautiful night xoxo


  • Desire gold member
    November 2

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    Wow~

    You are so Good at Haikus~ and I just have to drop my jaw for I struggle with them...The ominous feel this has~ grabs hard
    Powerful piece Sweet Soul!!
    Bravo!! You know while reading- I kept thinking of the significance of the
    blackbird and reference to powerlines...Excellent!
    Keep that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice Brother
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Lady Altheia
    November 2

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    Hoodwink 144

    Interesting haiku. This week is your special week and no one deserves it more. Enjoy all the extra Bandit attention. You have been hoodwinked because someone cared about you.

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