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Condemned

Shadow-clad tenticles retract,
react with haste distaste ~
not of repulsion, but expulsion

    -- for theirs is not a blind eye.

If graven images cause hark,
surely a spark of the Incarnate

    shall incinerate desolate souls.

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Prompt:
Portraits of Jesus freak me out.
20-35 words

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 5

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    Wow...profound write on the prompt..Controversial subject, yet you did very well with your word play, and word choice!


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    November 2
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    that there is some fancy word usage. Nicely penned.


  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 2
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    bravo!!!


  • Not-The-Sun
    November 2

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    your placement of tricky words makes this piece thought provoking for the reader.
    loved "tenticles retract,"
    and "haste distaste"
    and the others line like that, that I really don't need to repeat good luck in the contest : )

  • pathetique.
    November 2

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    First stanza was so, so well written, not to mention the rest. Amazing language.
    I really like this.
    Best of luck to you.
    --Katie.

    • Xianaria gold member
      November 2
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      Thank you I had a word play going on in my head, so I went with it.

      ~ Tim

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