Driving past the dreary torture chamber, I have nightmares of him jumping at me from non-secular glass stained windows;
ashamed that he sacrificed his body for humans
that turned out like me.
Author notes
32 words. portraits of jesus freak me out
prompt.
A contest entry
- Late nite quickie for the willing by Cerulean Sunrise.
475 points, ended November 2, 7 entries
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yeah, jesus creeps me out too. hence i'm not christian. great quickie.
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Nicely taken from the prompt.
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there is a lot of emotion within this piece ~
quite vivid in its' imagery.
nicely done & best wishes in the contest!
~ Tim
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ohhh bravo!
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I'm really feeling this. Last two lines just packed an amazing punch...
You did an awesome job.
Good luck.
--Katie
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