Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read Contests Groups Learn Forums Store Help
 

Untitled X

Fiery waxen feathers disable the commander.
As Isaac's yet undiscovered theory intercedes
The principal pedestal ascends, obscured.

Bare-knuckled and branded, despite his title,
He grasps for affable, grey-blue alabaster;
Aspiring to pierce the sacred mount.

Below, on solid surfaces, bruised, he screams
At a crystal Cretan canvas in Gaelic rhythm -
Satin, stained with insatiable lust?


Helios and Selene cherish the spectacle;
Again, he fashions flames and plentiful plumage
In earnest for future endeavors.
 



Author notes

Inspired by my Classics' lectures and;

"While I'm some stain there on your bed sheet,
You're my diamond in the rough".

~ Candy, Paolo Nutini

What do you think?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • arafura gold member
    November 2

    Edit | Reply
    Excellent. A bit different to your usual style I think? Very impressive anyway poet!