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Sing To Me A Song Of Sorrow...

Sweet soft sorrow seem to only sing 

to me, as today waves like yesterday goodbye's,
and sand flows through fingers that depict's
memories of moments spent in regret
that eats hollow holes in the pit of my soul.

 

moans replace humming hymms as I

surround shame beneath weeping willows

and carry haunting screams on the wind

like broken dreams, and fictionary missionaries.

 

sing sweet nothing that sounds

like rain and taste like the sun,

when words become memories 

and time stand still like distance tomorrows,

sing to me a song of sorrow that allows 

me to find peace without all its sorrow.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 5

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    oh dagg..

    I READ THIS! l.o.l. I forgot to comment because i was rushing to leave the day i read it.. yeah this is a beauty lady..very nice flow, great imagery too..


  • Antebellum
    November 2

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    I really like the take on this title.
    only suggestion would be to change your font color. Its diffacult to read. as far as the writing, I really like this.

    " and time stand still like distance tomorrows,
    sing to me a song of sorrow that allows
    me to find peace without all its sorrow."

    I really like this ending.
    thanks for entering.