Come weep with me on this dark night.
The one I love has left my sight.
As pain from loss does bring me low,
And tears of grief begin to flow,
In arms of comfort hold me tight.
I've bid goodbye through sacred rite
And sorrow's peak has reached its height.
My heart's been dealt its greatest blow.
Come weep with me.
Come my friends my strength is slight.
Your hearts of love will be my light.
Fresh life will then begin to grow
And ice of death will melt like snow.
You will again my hope ignite.
Come weep with me.
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- Rondeaux, s’il vous plaît by Peripatetic.
1500 points, ended November 24, 12 entries
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Comments
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The sharing of grief mitigates its pain, and tears which fall and mingle with our own remind us we are still not alone. Loss is inevitable if we love. The hope of love is that we may have more loved ones to share our losses than we will have time to lose.
The poem is touching throughout, and the last stanza is exceptionally compelling.
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very sweet sad and yet hopeful, thank you for sharing this with us good luck
Linda
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Very simple
and charming, if sad. I thought the open long vowels at the end of lines three and four (associated with warmth) set up the next line with its reference to comfort.
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A good poem!
with a recurrent theme of 'love lost' but still you shared that little message of hope and love, that only true friends provide - in times like these.
good luck in the contest, joy
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This is beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love how the repetition intensifies the mourning!
Good luck in the contest!
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Nicely done, I like the structure of this, and the words are equally matched
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Very Nice!
You did great justice to the form with this melancholy piece.
Excellent job!
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Excellent
You invoked so much feeling with your words. And did it with the use of form in such a masterful way. Best of luck in the contest
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Excellent in form and content.
Good luck in the contest,
Bill
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