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waiting for cremation to recreate

dear storm drain palms,

i sign my name with Q's now,
and munch almonds and
sun roasted nuts, while i'm
waiting for you to come home.

i even mailed a letter to you, here
believing words would bring you back.

but they can't.

love,
the pistaccio girl

p.s

mom says ashes
are broken by
definition; dead
people can't breathe.

Author notes

this sucks sorry

w r i t i n g 0 f r e e d o m

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  • Candy Morphine
    November 3

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    mom says ashes
    are broken by
    definition
    -something makes me like that line.
    a lot.
    i just have no idea what.

  • cherrytree
    November 2

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    mom says ashes
    are broken by
    definition; dead
    people can't breathe

    that is soo beautiful.
    this really doesnt suck, its actually very good!
    good luck in the contest!