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bend before i break

you said my ribcage is empty
and played each individual bone
as if a grand piano
delighting in the hollow tune
pressed sustenance to my lips
mocking as it trickled away 
to a puddle around us
this was a truth you already knew
that i am a willow
that can't stand in this storm
and you revel in being 
my personal hurricane

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  • Dulcima
    November 24
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    A willow offers shelter. Yes, lovely metaphors. You're v good.


  • PastelMoons gold member
    November 7

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    love the metaphors!!
    'you said my ribcage is empty
    and played each individual bone
    as if a grand piano...'
    Awesome!!!!