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Song of a Nameless Field


Down the old Indian trail where the thick ivy grows
where tree-shade nymphs dance o'er the young foxes' holes
where groundhogs and rabbits forage with wary eye
where my vehicle chases deer from the downy gravel-road side
where autumn leaves give color to the nuke plants beyond
the wide river that meanders past the refinery dock pylons...

I come to the fields where my electronics shacks stand
which monitor the air for industrial pollutants and gas
and I hear the ground whisper in lost Algonquin tongues,
the rustle of soft moccasins, painted Mohawk haircuts
speaking to young trees, new grasses, old rocks
that all reply back in the Great Spirit's tongue…

Beneath my heavy boots their vanished history
of arrowheads, of broken pottery, of squaws, of fleeting feet
of bare-chested warriors still whooping their cries
to instill fear in all life, whether it swims, runs, or flies
who once built their wild world around honor and love
who still sing their songs from below, from above.








a complimentary piece to  in falkirk field by aychellus


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  • aychellus gold member
    November 1

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    not sure if your mocking or just pretty good but i liked it anyway, i get the feeling your giggling uncontrolably at my clumsy blunderings, but that's ok too as i'm nothing if not diplomatic(did i mention that) that broken pottery and arrowheads funny how one or two words can spawn a poem.i couldn't read it properly for laughing at your previous messages but thankyou anyway
    by the way did i mention i was diplomatic!!


    • wbiro gold member
      November 1
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      not mocking, and no giggling here- well, maybe some- but not at your poem, which was delightful (and as you see inspiring- although it happened to be me lol) - if I giggled it was at the stark differences in heritage and archeological prospects between our two fields- why, my fields don't even have names! and the only martial events that occurred there were a scalping or two, if that...

      I tried to keep as many 'parallels' as I could, so a reader could enjoy the similarities as well as the differences... so maybe that's where you sensed 'mocking'- but I think the average third-party reader will enjoy the two pieces together and their fascinating contrasts in history...

      as to the details- yes, I just described one of my jobs in detail- the remote electronics shacks, the nuke plants, the wide river, the refinery, the foxes, rabbits, groundhogs, the vehicle chasing the deer... all as real as the no-name fields...!