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i'll fly with broken wings

Your voice was cracking, and you paused to clear your throat before asking, “What the hell is wrong with you?”
I inhaled the green smoke and let it wrap around my ribcage, enveloping my mind and exiting the black hole behind my clenched teeth.
There was a smugness about you that crept beneath my skin and entwined itself to unknown chromosomes. And I hated you for it.
Yet you coughed up an apology that was owed me and I passed.
I was supposed to be stronger than our last hydro hit. But after all,

 I’m just a girl with a dollar store smile.

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  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 4
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    "Im just a girlwith a dollar store smile"

  • Eusebius
    November 3
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    Oh, a most intriguing write... flung open to the widest of possibilities. This is a most fine prose piece, deftly done, indeed!!!


  • Mango Memories gold member
    November 3
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    .


  • Cannonsfire
    November 2

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    I'll take a million of them...smiles that is

  • Bob Fox
    November 1

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    Becca

    Your writes always intrigue me for they are filled with a life somehow not visited by many. I do bid you well for I can sense some very deep pain poet. Smile the big bright smile.


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      November 2

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      im glad tht you find my writes intriguing, bob... i would have to call them odd, myself...


  • Nom de Plume
    November 1

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    Im sure that smile is from the million dollar store I like this, speaks profoundly on the problem of undervaluing ourselves, allowing others to walk all over us...


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      November 2
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      im trying to comment on your comment and all i can do is look at your avatar...lmao! oh rob......


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 1

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    DAMN..

    This hits like a ton of bricks collapsing in midtown on a busy workday in summer..
    very powerful, and like the commenter below..I LOVE THE ENDING LINE!! EXCELLENT WORK my sweet baby..


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      November 1
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      thank you for your support baby... eh, just a little remembering.... hugssssss to one very loyal reader....


  • FreeFalling911
    November 1

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    I love the describtion in this.
    I love how you use cracking, clenching, smugness.
    Great work on this.

    I love the ending....
    Great job

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