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November 1, 2009 - Garnet and Gold

Garnet and Gold 

Nippy breezes fetch

a frosted limb twists and shakes

fall’s garnet and gold

 

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Prompt: Haiku

A contest entry

Do the little things in Autumn add sparks to your life as the seasons change?

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  • Coldwater
    November 6
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    Yes, very visual, 'nippy breezes' 'frosted limb' bring the 'shiver' 'garnet and gold' a smile, and the whole a pleasure.
    Regards.

  • churchill
    November 6
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    Quite taken with the title. Absolutely beautiful haiku. It has exquisite imagery that tempts the senses.

    churchill


  • Shantti silver member
    November 3

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    Bbbrrrrr. Reminds me of an Autumn ice storm. "Fall's garnet and gold" I love it this is remarkable. Very visually appealing Thank you for entering

    • Bjarne gold member
      November 3
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      Thank You

      Best wishes as you judge your entries.
      Thanks for your comments.

      bjarne


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    November 2

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    Perfect imagery...so very lovely!



    Az

    • Bjarne gold member
      November 2
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      Thanks Azlyn

      I appreciate you stopping by. Best wishes!
      bjarne

  • dawnslight7
    November 1

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    This haiku is balm for my soul. It is lovely to hear with imagery to delight and so sensual.

    dawnslight

    • Bjarne gold member
      November 2
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      Thanks

      I appreciate your kind comments.
      bjarne

  • kandinsky9
    November 1

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    you amaze

    To engage all our senses in the compact verse is quite amazing. Perfect haiku honoring the beauty of fall. Liked it.

    kandinsky

  • worley281
    November 1

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    Sometimes it is difficult to determine which you do best write about mankind or your observations of nature. I believe the answer is both exceedingly well. Like the visual impact and beautiful language in this enchanting haiku.

    worley

    • Bjarne gold member
      November 1
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      Thank You

      I appreciate you stopping by and your very kind remarks. Thanks again!
      bjarne


  • ivoire gold member
    November 1

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    Fall's Beauty Showcased

    Love this haiku. It offers such a breath-taking image of fall. One we can keep with us during the long winter. It warmed my heart.

    ivoire

    • Bjarne gold member
      November 1
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      Thanks

      I appreciate your comments and support.
      bjarne

  • stratford471
    November 1

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    Thanks for this recognition of how Fall's beauty touches us. The haiku is lovely - what a wonderful title!

    stratford

    • Bjarne gold member
      November 1
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      Thanks Stratford

      I appreciate you kind comments and thanks for stopping by.
      bjarne

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