I watch the clouds
I see the rain fall
And I just watch.
Not moving at all.
I stare out the window
And always know
That rain must fall
And flowers must grow
I think about my music
They say, “Blackbird fly
Into the light
Of the dark black night”
My music’s my soul
My life, and my heart
I let it take over
I feel a new start
My spirit is lifted
My wings are now spread
This utter loneliness
Was all in my head
My music’s been there
Through thick and thin
It’s now part of my being
I can’t lose it again
When I feel it’s over
And the whole world walks out
My music walks in
There’s no need for doubt
It's like my sunshine
It's my inspiration
It helps me take flight
With no hesitation
I am blackbird and my music's my life.
Author notes
We were assigned to write an "I am" poem for English and my best friend wrote "I am music" So I wrote this in response.
Comments
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quite impressive :)
I liked it very much. myself, being a musician, I can relate; in some senses. I feel that this poem was very well written, and followed the rules of writing quite well. it feels the right length, and the word choices feel good.
if you're looking for constructive criticism, I can't give you much in the actual writing of the poem; that part's good. however, I feel that perhaps you might want to consider elucidating to the reader the change in between 9 - 15. the change just seems to happen, with little or no explanation. just a thought. I feel that this could be the climax of the poem (just an opinion), and I feel that four lines could possibly be thought out differently.
loved it. (Y)
keep up the good work.
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