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the night does not forgive

"Darkness hangs oppressive and still,

casting black veils

of unease upon the night air"

                                                                                -Redmoonrising

I am that entity, that gravity of sight

which lingers like a bloodless corpse,

a blunted knife, along the droopy eye at dawn.

A shadow buried deep, I am,

within the ever present gray

gathering along the dusk choked eve,

gathering along your rotting heart

where twilight only whimpers life,

where life ends not in sparks, eternal light,

but with your fleshy curtains drawn tight

against  my cold, bewitching charm.

Your withered fingers seek me out;

the nostrils of your nose are quick

to catch my scent, my smell, a nauseous scent

which wafts in toxic plumes from deep within

the melancholic grave. Your careless grunts do seek

that torture self-inflicted with the razor cuts infected

with those moon-pocked memories of her.

Ah, her! I'll weave her presence stitched by time

into the hallows of your orbless holes

and sick the hellish hounds of days gone by,

 gnawing at  remembrance... plucking at

the tender skin of promises revoked.

Too late the hour now...too late the words

spewed from your mouth... "Forgive me, dear,

forgive me, please and grant me peace."

But this unruly darkness, knows no forgiveness.

It's appetite for suffering shall not be starved

by earnest quotes screamed before an alcoholic universe

which staggers through frost bitten tears of angry stars.

They shall never reach the budding hope

that angels might in heaven's haunt retrieve

all punishment for true remorse.

Your end shall never come, but cast itself,

fling itself upon the back of nightmares black

that you must stride until the day appears

and strangles me beneath its sunlit breath.

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prompt: # 1: "Darkness hangs oppressive and still, casting black veils of unease upon the night air..."

A personification of night.

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  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    November 8

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    A truly gorgeous piece filled with muted colors of darkness, overflowing with rich imagery. You have penned a most worthy piece. Awesome lines....

    "I am that entity, that gravity of sight
    which lingers like a bloodless corpse,
    a blunted knife, along the droopy eye at dawn."

    Thanks for entering and Good Luck in the Contest!!!


    • rrw gold member
      November 9
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      Hee I like it when you say my writes are gorgeous! I also like working with the "emotional" side of dark writes.


  • spideracer gold member
    November 7

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    Wow again! Awesome be this write, one that fits the prompt well too. Your take on night is mindblowing, a poem that truly deserves to win a trophy. So on that note I'll say good luck in the contest.


    • rrw gold member
      November 9
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      thanks, Spider. I felt good about working from Red's prompt. Like working in this semi-dark arena.


  • Jayde1
    November 2

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    wow

    this is awesome...
    fantastic and well written,


    loved this bit...

    But this unruly darkness, knows no forgiveness.
    It's appetite for suffering shall not be starved
    by earnest quotes screamed out toward an alcoholic universe
    which staggers through frost bitten tears of angry stars.


    great work...keep it up and good luck in z contest


    Jayde

    • rrw gold member
      November 9
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      thanks, Jay! Yeah, I wanted to explore that real darkness of loneliness and a bit of the idea of doing someone wrong... and regrets.

  • redmoonnrizing silver member
    November 2
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    Your prompt is a quote from one of my poems:

    "Darkness hangs oppressive and still, casting black veils of unease upon the night air"
    by redmoonnrizing

    This contest will end Nov 8th - Good Luck


    • rrw gold member
      November 9
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      very inspiring quote, Red! Thanks for the bronze!

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