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Wild Wings: Collaboration With CarolDesjarlais

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If you come back as a tree, I shall return as a bird
so I may serenade you with my song.
If you come back as a stone, I shall return as a curious child,
to tuck you into my pocket
and marvel at your many colors.
 
Wild wings have we, whirring over this stretched canvas
of life. Woeful whispers cause us to pause, mid-air.
Deep crevasses have we, gathering sediments of sorrow,
erupting from within to spill gestated seeds.
Chaotic currents surge beneath these casual bones, 
a wisdom that is not entirely our own to claim or clamor.
 
 
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And, if you bird, I shall be air

that lifts your feathers, clears your glide

so might your journey be swift and sure

as carried by a mother wind

 

And, if you stone, I shall make of you clay

that I can set as monument to friendship’s face

then bronze or marble poetry

will be upon your throne

 

So sweet, this sail in turquoise bowl,

o’er turned, to wash our sorrows down:

Those mountains, there, we rise above

are clothed in cotton-candied clouds

on which to rest and chat awhile,

like sisters do and sisters should,

and have, as we’ve often

held each other’s hearts aloft.

 

 

 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 

 

Author notes


 
 
Art: "Cassandra Aspara Aspect" - Hyancinthe Baron
 
Picture courtesy of CarolDesjarlais
 
 
 
This collaboration began (my first stanza) as a result of a comment
I'd left on Carol's poem,
 
"Let Me Be Stone"

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • michael thomas
    November 22
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    To Carol and Wanda

    Nothing can be so beautiful as this poem. True poetry is not alliteration or metaphor or hidden meanings. True poetry is the bond between souls of the writers and their audiences. All the finest words in the world fall to die but the words of women bound to each other in love will rise forever as Carol finally says, "....held each other's hearts aloft."

    We all stand in awe of this magic. Thanks to both of you.


    • Night Hope gold member
      1 day ago
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      Thank you, Michael. As you know, Carol is a force to be reckoned with, one that is surely larger than life. She has long fed my soul with the sustenance of her words and it is quite easy to gain inspiration from her song. I'm glad you liked it.


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    November 7

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    this is a powerful collaboration by two of the site's finer poets and is a marvelous display of your individual voices. bravo, ladies.


  • aychellus gold member
    November 2

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    this is tender beyond expression , you must hold great affection for each other to write in such feathery and heartfelt tones. i must admit carols reply is truely celestial in character and content and gives the feeling of floating.
    just beautiful!!


  • kaibab silver member
    November 2

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    Such a flight of spirits sewn in sail,
    climbing mast in stronger platform,
    ancient vessel wave-line spoken,
    traversing page in deep-blue motion.

    So wonderful you two


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 2
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      Ty, dear poet. "sewn in sail" yes, and knowing not to let an island go by without stopping to make a friend of it!

  • michael thomas
    November 2
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    Such pristine clarity and severance of words shaved to wondrous effect. Two of the giants of poetess heaven. Thank you both for the art and corresponding elevation of words.

    michael

    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 2
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      ty Michael. What a nice comment from you! I see it needs a perk or two on mine... and will have Wanda perk it for the coding surely is confounding my ability to edit!


  • chibiakutenshi
    November 2

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    Gorgeous honestly. Way beyond anything I could write. Just so wonderful. It's like standing in front of a giant skyscraper and trying to fathom it's height in relationship to your own. Thank you for the good read!


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 2
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      ty chiabiakytenshi. Wanda inspires me often and I am honored to pen on the same page as her!


  • Stuart Higginson gold member
    November 1

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    Hi Carol & Wanda!

    Well I was barely midway through this before the poem coerced my hand to the mouse and made me add it to my list of recommendable works by others And it looks like you've introduced another new name to my favourites list Wanda! I doubt Carol's shall stay new to me for long, though, for her talent has talked, and my soul's been sold

    This is a beautiful tribute to a friendship, without doubt. For all we moan about AP at times, could any of us imagine life without it, retracing back to times before we knew each other existed, before each other's words had written themselves a place in our respective lives? I think not! It's unthinkable ... horrific ... nah!!!


    My favourite lines from both sections:


    "If you come back as a stone, I shall return as a curious child,
    to tuck you into my pocket
    and marvel at your many colors."

    &

    "And, if you stone, I shall make of you clay
    that I can set as monument to friendship’s face
    then bronze or marble poetry
    will be upon your throne"

    You only need look at the first pic on my profile to know my love of stones ... I've scattered them everywhere throughout the flat, on candle-tables, bookcases, around the bath ... I love spending an afternoon in all weathers, just wandering across the coast overturning and scrutinising all the different ones I can find!

    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 2
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      ty, Stuart. I will add you as friend as soon as I get through these comments. Although my part needs some editing, yet, I think we are almost there. When Wanda commented on my original poem, I knew, immediately that collaboration was needed.

    • Night Hope gold member
      November 2
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      Oh, we are both stone gatherers from way back, too. Do go by Carol's pages, as soon as is feasible, Stuart. Had I known you weren't familiar with her work before now,
      I'd have certainly suggested you become so, forthwith. She is one of my dearest friends on AP. She and Nicolette constantly inspire me with their beautiful words.


  • Nicolette gold member
    November 1

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    Two of my favourite and two of the best poems on AP together on one page!! A poem with wings from women with wings...where you took me with this one, Vlindertjie. Absolutely gorgeous poetry - the power of sisterly love, the power of poetry in all its beauty. Simply love this one...what a way to start my day!

    ~ Nicolette


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 2
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      Ty, Nicolette, and you are ours!

    • Night Hope gold member
      November 1
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      Thank you, Nic. Maybe one of these days, I'll catch ya when the sun's just right and convince you to collab with me, too, my - our - beautiful sister.


      • Nicolette gold member
        November 1
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        jaaaa, that would be great


        • Night Hope gold member
          November 1
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          Anytime you're ready, I'm game. Just IM or email me somethin' and we'll get this show on the road.


  • Emmyb gold member
    November 1

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    how adorable are you!!!??

    the first verse was so cute.

    oh dearest night hope if you were a pebble id skim you across the sea and you'd bounce a thousand times before falling neatly to the water.


    • CarolDesjarlais silver member
      November 2
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      What a darling comment... oh, to be bounced by the hand of love across water..ah! Ty!

    • Night Hope gold member
      November 1
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      Ohhh, according to Danny, I'm pretty adorable, alright. But I fear the heft of my stone would cause me to sink, Sweetie. Thank you, Emmyb. Carol's contribution is posted now; I'm not sure if we're done with it yet, but here's several helpings, at any rate.

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