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derailed

Seven portals to hell resurrected

on tips of sacrificial pins

past the point of repair, I pleaded to nobody

this miracle of life is full of pot-holes,

shameless interferences,  

inadequate players.

 

We've exhausted this devil's highway

wandered far into Desolation, 

fallen angels are buried alive here,

I hear bones rattle in southern winds

they whisper madly in the crags,

plot bloody revenge.

 

When someone says they dont love you,

it should kill you instantly  

apart from blessed virgins,

no one's willing to sleep in mangers, anymore.

 

Harvest moon shines a yellow fear

at her feet seduction wanes

sways of baby-I-love-you's,

could we believe in ourselves enough to try?

 

Without answers spoken,

I disregarded the scrape

the keys made, clanging

against a door I refused to open,

no matter how heavy the knock.

...

Author notes



"Your's are not exclusive, we all contain defects. The tiny ones pass by without ever knowing the pain we cause. Larger ones...well those we need to work on, get over and figure out why we had them in the beginning. When we finally admit that we are not perfect and the world won't die if it does not revolve around us, we might have a chance. It's slim at best but isn't hopeless a defect too?"

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  • Swan song gold member
    November 14
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    Excellent!!! this is yummy yummy gummy stuff loved it you are just too good too good I tell you


  • Randomly Beautiful
    November 11
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    This is lovely. I tried so hard to come up with something for this contest. I LOVED the prompt. The muse just wouldn't do it. Glad to see yours did!


  • Desire gold member
    November 10
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    Wowzers~

    The prompt tugs hard and Your words harder~
    as You raise the bar quite high here
    I'm so Imperfect I lack words to speak
    Powerful Metaphors~ Imagery...should I say ditto
    Excellent~
    We've exhausted this devil's highway
    wandered far into Desolation,
    fallen angels are buried alive here,
    Almost breathless after inhaling this...

    Takes the Reader there~ Bravo!

    Keep that quill dancing Beautiful
    Thank You for sharing Your Voice & Talent
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    November 8
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    I so enjoy that you have your own style going on. You aren't trying to be nobody else.

    Enjoyed.


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 8
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    the scraping of the keys rang loud against the
    knocks of the door to your heart that wont open!!
    now this profound writing my dear, you are a
    stellar writer and I am blessed to be able to call you
    friend, you a blessings to AP and me!

    love and blessings

    Rend


  • Amera gold member
    November 8
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    Wonderful read! Line after line of perfected original imagery. I found this poem to be captivating!

    love,
    Amera♥


  • XxXEmoxXxAngelXxX
    November 7
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    Amazingly ochestrated!
    wonderful, twisted imagery,
    an awesome tangle of emotions...
    i really love it!


  • Cannonsfire
    November 7
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    Worth waiting for, though that apostrophe snuck in (its) lol this is a fine penning and the last stanza sums it up, it's up to us if we deny what imperfections we have and not let them take hold. C


    • JinSays gold member
      November 7
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      I saw that, and was removing it in my edit, darling.
      only one edit, Im walking away, I promise
      thank you for being patient with me.


  • awannabepoet
    November 3
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    OOPS .. too soon .. BBL


  • Cannonsfire
    November 2
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    lol well of course I knew you were perfect

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